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 Posted: Oct 29, 2006 - 12:03 AM
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Jiwa Dancer
Joined: Oct 15, 2006
Posts: 18
Location: Langley, British Columbia, canada
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hi benito
for future poems you should go to the Poetry Corner Forum first and then click on new topic and then your poem will be posted with its title.
i am looking forward for more. |
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Posted: Oct 28, 2006 - 11:26 PM
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Directed Jiwa
Joined: Mar 29, 2004
Posts: 45
Location: London, England
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thank you for the 'gong' description that is actually like what was going on in my head as I thought it
but i didnt use any form i know others have, partly because theres no strict limit on syllables per line or where rhymes go
I sort of just thought it up one day when i was thinking 'i want to simplify how i write' and do that with a proper message. W H Auden could seem very simple but very deep-touching with clear, disciplined poems so I wrote it..
The genesis of the poem was the desire to want to get rid of anger about hypocrisy re:politics/typified by us government...but also about the use of sentimental band aids to cover quite horrible holes in their moral behaviour...the christian references were tied in with that: e.g
'bible-law', 'markets', 'six threescore six', 'fall', 'eden tree'...
Garbled answer, sorry. Hope it is helpful. |
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Posted: Oct 27, 2006 - 04:53 PM
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Jiwa Dancer
Joined: Oct 15, 2006
Posts: 18
Location: Langley, British Columbia, canada
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thank you benito
powerful images and rythm and message
I am wondering about the form - did you invent it or is it a defined form?
is there a pattern for the rhyme?
you repeat the "four" sound over and over and it becomes a kind of huge gong
tolling and tolling.
sjahari |
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Posted: Oct 27, 2006 - 07:01 AM
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Directed Jiwa
Joined: Mar 29, 2004
Posts: 45
Location: London, England
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Did you ask for poets?
I write poetry and am a big fan.
Can I offer you a recent one...
Its not meant to be anti-american in terms of people: I'm not.
Its about politics/other things.
America, what you were founded for
Has not been meted after
Dispensed instead as bible-law
In the markets where you barter
(With a bully’s hammer)
The honest, greedy poor.
Say, USA, do you still Ignore
The far cries of Africa,etc. or
Quote / unquote: ‘No cause for war’
The native dead under the basement floor?
A mouth from the senate
Shivers the wires:
‘Listen up, y’all
The President can wager
These folk deserve to crawl
And are justified to the slaughter’.
Responses please to the opinion store
Or, give us call: six threescore
Six. Be advised however,
We aim to ignore.
It is the same loss, all this;
the empty fall
no less of tears, oil or idle towers.
The eden tree unlearnt in fire,
Now as before. |
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Posted: Oct 25, 2006 - 07:18 AM
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Jiwa Dancer
Joined: Oct 19, 2006
Posts: 15
Location: Spain
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Hi Sjahari,
I'll ask Esaias for your radio programme and I will keep my eye on the radio programme so as not to miss it. It sounds great and I'm thinking it's a shame we all live so far apart as it would be great to try some choreography to poetry and music. I know there are dancers in the States who perform to Sufi poetry. Just imagine, a group of poets, dancers, musicians, (and Jungians too, Sjariban). I've been writing some stuff recently about dance, spirituality, and archetypes etc. All we need is a wealthy sponsor! |
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Yafiah Katherine
http://barzakhabound.blogspot.com
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Posted: Oct 24, 2006 - 08:35 PM
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Jiwa Walker
Joined: Sep 07, 2002
Posts: 10
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| Tell me Sjahari did Bapak give you the name- it is as unusual as my own Sjariban- modified with the subsequent change in the Indonesian language to Shariban- rare I am told is its use.... |
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Posted: Oct 24, 2006 - 12:19 PM
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Jiwa Dancer
Joined: Oct 15, 2006
Posts: 18
Location: Langley, British Columbia, canada
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Hi Yafiah
my name is actually "sjahari hollands"
the web site wont let me be sjahari so i signed up as
sjaharih
yes. For me dance and poetry are twin passions too.
My major interest is contact improvisation.
my radio reading is available through Esaias. I am sure he can set you up with the download of it.
I am currently working on another broadcast of a long dance poem with the music of Mike Vargas. Should be ready in one or two days.
i enjoyed your blog
luv
sjahari |
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Posted: Oct 24, 2006 - 09:19 AM
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Jiwa Dancer
Joined: Oct 19, 2006
Posts: 15
Location: Spain
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Dear Sjaharih, have I missed your radio show or is it yet to come? Dance and poetry are potent partners and close to my heart.
love,
Yafiah |
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Yafiah Katherine
http://barzakhabound.blogspot.com
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Post subject: THE POETRY CORNER IS HAPPENING
Posted: Oct 24, 2006 - 06:24 AM
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Jiwa Dancer
Joined: Oct 15, 2006
Posts: 18
Location: Langley, British Columbia, canada
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lots of new poems are being posted.
any one wanting to join in is welcome.
i am sure there are lots out there to share. . . . ???
comments welcome too. |
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